If we look at history, it is clear that since time immemorial, people have always wanted to create an egalitarian society but have been unsuccessful. This is largely due to the fact that the impetus to work hard and excel would be lost if all were to remain equal. I firmly believe that a perfect society needs some kind of social inequality, or as it can be called, a distinction in ability. A number of arguments surround my opinion.
A perfect society needs some inequality based on the ability of the person. What keeps the world going is the motive to work hard, excel and take the lead. Those in the higher strata of society should be there because of their superior abilities and they should have greater responsibilities and, therefore, a higher social standing. An ideal society should have some struggle. If you had no struggle in life would you be happy? No, because that takes all the fun and enjoyment out of the difficulty - the losing, the failures, and the overcoming - the victory, the success.
The concern arises when some form of inequality does not allow equal opportunities for the people. A well-known example can be cited from the caste system is India. People are born into a caste. Caste membership determines your occupation, social interaction, power, and education. No amount of achievement can change your caste position. In such cases the opportunities are denied to the people of the lower caste. Now, the democratic set up has reserved quotas in an effort to bring equal opportunities for all. Even in these situations, the freedom to fail or succeed according to merit should be there otherwise there would be negative discrimination against those who actually deserve.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, there are different types of inequality. The inequality can be social or economic or based on gender. Different people have different notions on the relation between equality and personal achievement. As far as opportunities are concerned, people should have equality. However, everyone should be free to work hard and reach the upper strata of society, otherwise no one would progress and there would be stagnation in society.
Plan followed
Intro: Strong view. A perfect society needs some social inequality
Para 1: Why a society needs some inequality
Para 2: Inequality in opportunity is not good
Conclusion: Different types of inequality should be considered differently. Equality in opportunities and equality in personal merit
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